2011年4月20日 星期三

I don't like a rainy day

  There are some reasons why I don't like a rainy day. First, I don't like my schedule what I have planned in advance being suspended because of rain. It's really bad that your plan was suspended. Second, the clothes that I have to wear the next day will dry slowly even not dry. So, I have to dry my clothes with a hair dryer. Fianlly, everything will be inconvenient in a rainy day. For example, you have to wear a raincoat when you go out. And you can't do outdoor activities in a rainy day. To sum up, I don't like a rainy day because I can't do many activities what I want to do.
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  1. 妤如2011年4月23日 清晨7:52

    It's really bad that your plan was suspended.
    我是想，既然＂suspended＂前面用過了，
    要不要換成＂delayed＂或是＂put off＂？

    Second, the clothes ... even not dry.
    ＂not dry＂，個人想用＂wet＂。

    ＂Fianlly,＂是＂Finally,＂吧。

    And you can't do outdoor...in a rainy day.
    在下覺得＂a rainy day＂提過好多次，
    整句改成↓可以嗎？
    ＂And you can't do outdoor activities as well.＂

    To sum up, ...because I can't do many activities what I want to do.
    ＂activities＂是先行詞，
    用＂what＂好像不太對，提議＂that＂。


    如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。

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  2. 姜姜(21)2011年5月4日 清晨7:19

    the clothes that...will dry slowly even not dry.
    這邊的even前面是不是要加個"and" 我也不確定。
    然後前面的suspend出現兩次，可以考慮其他同義字。
    最後，建議你可以變換句型，因為我覺得你這篇文章的句型或用字重覆太多。

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  3. 孟萱2011年5月4日 晚上11:05

    最後一句
    To sum up, I don't like a rainy day because I can't do many activities what I want to do.
    的what應該要改成which或that哦:D

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  4. 姚薇...愛慘珉玗了!!!2011年5月4日 晚上11:19

    For example, you have to wear a raincoat when you go out. And you can't do outdoor activities in a rainy day.
    這裡的S是you,但你前面的S是I耶..
    看這這有點不知妳的S倒底是....?

    以上~
    辛苦了!
    我愛淋雨XD

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  5. 篔簹2011年5月4日 晚上11:21

    even not dry有點怪(汗

    Fianlly
    是finally吧?

    其他沒了(笑

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  6. 亭安2011年5月4日 晚上11:21

    我覺得整篇的主詞要一致比較好
    不然一下子"I"，一下子又是"you"
    尤其是這句It's really bad that your plan was suspended
    我覺得改成my plan比較好

    I can't do many activities "what" I want to do.
    我覺得這裡要用that或which

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  7. 品婷2011年5月4日 晚上11:28

    有時候用I有時候用you好像有點奇怪
    in a rainy day應該是on a rainy day吧

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  8. 冠伶2011年5月5日 上午8:10

    1.It's really bad that your plan was suspended.
    →It's really bad that my plan was put off.
    2.Second, the clothes that I have to wear the next day will dry slowly even not dry.
    →Second, the clothes that I have to wear the next day will dry slowly and even remain damp.
    3.Fianlly, everything will be inconvenient in a rainy day.
    →Finally, everything will be inconvenient on a rainy day.
    4.And you can't do outdoor activities in a rainy day.
    →And I can't do outdoor activities, either.
    5.To sum up, I don't like a rainy day because I can't do many activities what I want to do.
    →To sum up, I don't like a rainy day because I can't do many activities that I want to do.
    (以上，淺見…)

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  9. 宜珍2011年5月6日 清晨6:52

    There are some reasons why I don't like a rainy day
    要不要改成複數??

    what I have planned in advance being suspended because of rain
    那個being可以省略掉

    Second, the clothes that I have to wear the next day will dry slowly even not dry. So, I have to dry my clothes with a hair dryer.
    好像在繞口令.....

    以上.....

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