2011年4月13日 星期三

Explaining a process- (4)-How to stay healthy

Staying healthy is easy and important. Please follow the steps below. First, you should eat more vagetables and fruit instead of eating junk food. And drink water instead of drinking beverages. Then, do regular exercise to strengthen your body. You can jog or go mountain climbing and so on. Next, have a balanced diet and you can take some nutriment or vitamin to enhance your immunity. Finally, go to bed early instead of staying up late. If you follow above steps, you would have a healthier and happier life.

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  1. First, you should eat more vagetables...
    應該是"vegetables"才對。

    Next,...and you can take some nutriment or vitamin...
    不確定"take + nutriment"可不可以。
    我可能會用"get"...吧。

    If you follow above steps,...
    我會在"follow"後面加個"the"★

    如有誤,請不吝嗇指教。

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  2. instead of eating junk food 跟drink water instead of drinking beverages 這邊我會省略eating跟drinking。
    以上。

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  3. First, you should eat more vagetables
    裡的vagetables 是vegetable喔!
    還有呀.....
    同樣這句妳重複出現eating&drinking
    妳可以將它省略
    ((比較順!

    以上!
    大發啦!

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  4. 我覺得"instead of"的句型有點多
    可以試著其他的寫法
    像是And drink water instead of drinking beverages.
    →And you shouldn't drink beverages. Instead, you should drink water.

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    you should eat more vagetables
    是vegetables喔!

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