I studied at Department of Applied Foreign Languages, National Tainan Commercial Vocational Senior High School (NTCVS). At first, my English ability wasn’t good. Therefore, I studied hard to improve my English ability. I always paid attention to what my teachers taught in class and took key notes. As my major was English, I study English every day. I studied not only the textbooks but also English magazines. Besides, I watched English movies and listened to English songs as my recreation. I also made efforts in the sections of reading and vocabulary memorizing to strength my English ability. With my teachers’ encouragement, I took the General English Proficiency Test and passed the intermediate level of GEPT. I’m glad that my efforts paid off.
Apart from studying hard, I also learned a lot from serving as cadre member as well as taking part in various clubs and activities. I have ever served as cleaning crew leader and P.E class leader. By being in charge of these positions, I got lots of precious experiences. For example, I knew how to communicate with others and how to process problem better. I also become more and more responsible. In addition, I took part in the story-telling competition with my classmate. We practiced a lot, and we helped each other to correct their drawbacks. Although we didn’t get good grade in the competition, we learned the importance of teamwork. I think it was a great experience.
I’m also good at sports. I joined the volleyball team for I was interested in playing volleyball. At first, I didn’t know how to play volleyball well, but the coach and seniors taught me patiently. With my own efforts, I can play volleyball well now. We attended many games, and every game was the precious experience. We can learn how to improve our skills in the next game. I also learned the importance of teamwork and encouragement. Moreover, I am also good at running. I often got the top three prize on the sports day. I really enjoy my life with my classmates in senior high school. I am lucky to meet these lovely people.
第一段的As my major was English, I study English every day只有這句是現在式耶 還有to strength my English ability應該是strengthen
回覆刪除第二段這句I also become more and more responsible.也變現在式了
差不多這樣^^
1.As my major was English, I study English every day.
回覆刪除→時態統一。
2.I also made efforts in the sections of reading and vocabulary memorizing to strength my English ability.
→memorizing要用to VR的形式，strength建議用sharpen。
3.I knew how to communicate with others and how to process problem better.
→process建議改成deal with。
4.I also become more and more responsible.
→建議用過去式。
5.we helped each other to correct their drawbacks.
→to刪掉。
6.I joined the volleyball team for I was interested in playing volleyball.
→for前面加逗號。
(以上，淺見。)
For example, I knew... process problem better.
回覆刪除＂process＂可以這樣用嗎？
I also become more and more responsible.
應該是＂became＂。
I often got the top three prize ...
＂prize＂應該要加＂s＂。
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。
As my major "was" English, I study English every day.
回覆刪除這裡應該用現在式，它算是一個事實
I joined the volleyball team for I was interested in playing volleyball.
for前面要加逗號