2011年3月14日 星期一

I have an unforgettable experience

  I have an unforgettable experience that when I was little I went out with my family. On our way to destination, I got lost with them. I was so afraid that I began to cry. Because of my crying, I was arrounded by more and more people. I felt so embarrassing that I ran away from them. But, I didn't know where I could go to. Therefore, I wandered the street and looker for my family. But, the street was too huge to find my family. I felt hungry and tired. I couldn't walk any more so I sat the roadside helplessly. All of a sudden, a car pulled up in front of me, and I saw my parents getting out of the car, and gave me a huge embrace. I was so pleasant that the tears rolled down my face. From then on, my parents always hold my hands tight lest I should get lost again.
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  1. 宜珍2011年3月14日 下午6:30

    I got lost with them是和他們一起迷路的意思
    第四行應改為embarrased
    第五行應該是where I could go就好了
    後面應該是looked
    第六行street 用huge來形容 好怪
    第七行sat 後面應該要加介係詞
    p.s.不用謝了!!!

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  2. 妤如2011年3月14日 下午6:35

    I have an...that when I was little I went out with my family.
    我覺得可以去掉that→
    I have an unforgettable experience when I was little and went out with my family.

    Because of...I was arrounded by...
    是＂surrounded＂吧。

    I didn't know where I could go to.
    應該要把＂to＂去掉。

    Therefore, I wandered the street and looker for my family.
    the street 前面要加介係詞（on）吧，我想。
    順便一提，＂looker＂→＂looked＂。

    ...I sat the roadside...
    總覺得sat後面要加個介係詞什麼的...←不確定。

    如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。

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  3. 品婷2011年3月14日 下午6:59

    On our way to destination前面要不要加the比較好?
    I didn't know where I could go to這邊的go後面應該不用to
    I wandered the street and looker for my family這裡look是不是打錯了?
    I sat the roadside helplessly這邊roadside前面要加介係詞
    I saw my parents getting out of the car, and gave me a huge embrace and連接的兩個動作(getting)(gave)時態要用一樣的

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  4. 亭安2011年3月16日 晚上11:00

    I didn't know where I could go to
    後面不用to

    文章裡so...that的句型蠻多的
    所以有些可以改一下它的寫法
    例：I was so afraid that I began to cry.
    →So afraid was I that I began to cry.
    這樣感覺起來比較有變化
    ^^

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  5. 孟萱2011年3月16日 晚上11:10

    But,
    應該要改成however等等的副詞
    因為but是連接詞~~

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  6. 冠伶2011年3月16日 晚上11:15

    1.I have an unforgettable experience that when I was little I went out with my family.
    →I had an unforgettable experience that when I was little, I went out with my family.
    2.Because of my crying, I was arrounded by more and more people.
    →Because of my crying, I was surrounded by more and more people.
    3.I felt so embarrassing that I ran away from them.
    →I felt so embarrassed that I ran away from them.
    4.But, I didn't know where I could go to.
    →But, I didn't know where I could go.
    5.Therefore, I wandered the street and looker for my family.
    →Therefore, I wandered the street and looked for my family.
    6.But, the street was too huge to find my family.
    →However, the street was too wide to find my family.
    7.I couldn't walk any more so I sat the roadside helplessly.
    →I couldn't walk any more so I sat by the roadside helplessly.(個人認為…)
    (以上，淺見…)

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  7. 姜姜(21)2011年3月16日 晚上11:51

    Because of my crying, I was arrounded by more and more people.這句的was arrounded 是什麼意思?還是有拼錯?
    Therefore, I wandered the street and looker for my family. 這邊是looked吧...
    然後anymore應該要合在一起。
    你的文章中連續用了兩次But，可以找其他的詞替換。
    以上。

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